I'm an amateur.....I don't know what I am doing....

It's Christmas and I bought myself a present.....gotta treat me good......a porn site. A model on that site zanged me and I wrote this story...It has no connection what so ever to the model or site. It's all fiction.
I tried to post it without success...changed the file I saved it in and posted it again....not happy with the formatting...but it's posted. I'm still learning my way around. My writing might suck; so if you don't like my English (my teacher never did) I'm sorry. Next. It's in two parts..this is the first. Let me know what you think.....
I went back and formatted it manually.....it's better.